Walt: To write about a journey.
Reflection: I think that I did quite well with the hook but I could improve on the words.
Speech
Hello there, my name is Blake, and today i’m going to tell you about a famous journey, that will live on in the hearts of every kiwi for decades to come. The journey sir Edmund Hillary, a famous new zealander, and Tenzing norgay, a famous nepalese, the sherpa that helped Ed to climb the mountain, that mountain being Everest. They reached the top of the mountain, on the 29 of may 1953 at 11:30 pm. After 7 weeks of dreaming and climbing they had finally reached the summit of Everest.
In 1952 Sir Edmund Hillary was invited to join the british expedition to climb Everest, the expedition was a failure. So Hillary went back to his normal life as a beekeeper, he farmed bees until he got a telegram, asking him if he would like to join another british expedition, attempting once again to climb mount everest. He accepted the invitation to become the first person to climb mount everest.
He flew to the border of nepal and china there he met Tenzing norgay. When they began to climb the mountain, it was tough but as they went along it became easier for them to climb the mountain, after seven weeks of hard climbing and dreaming Edmund Hillary and Tenzing Norgay made it to a cliff face, it was steep and Completely vertical, Edmund Hillary went first. He found a way to the top, he squeezed in between a crack in the cliff and using all his body Strength he managed to pull himself up to the top. Once they reached the top of mount everest they each planted a flag from their own country, they stayed on the summit for around fifteen minutes before their oxygen became low and they climbed down to meet their fellow climbers. They told them about how they had reached the top and about the cliff face, ed told the story of how they climbed it and they all returned to their own countries to tell of how the mission was a success.
